Cold outreach scripts that don't read like copy-paste sales pitches - any success stories?

Been trying to network for IBD roles but my LinkedIn DMs feel so robotic. Tried using templates from career services but got ghosted 9/10 times. Heard some folks here hacked this by blending structure with personalization - how do you actually make cold messages sound human while staying professional? What phrases or framing helped you get responses?

lol ‘scripts’. every analyst uses the same templates then wonders why MDs dont reply. pro tip: mention their recent deal BUT add a hot take on the sector. works 20% of the time which is 19% better than ‘I admire ur career journey’ cringe

i literally wrote ‘saw ur work on [deal] and had some Qs’ last week and got a reply!! but now idk what to ask in the call…is it better to prep technicals or just be curious?? pls help

Focus on creating mutual value. Example: ‘I noticed your team advised on X merger - I’ve been analyzing Y comparable deal and noticed Z financing structure quirk. Would appreciate 10 minutes to discuss how emerging regulatory changes might impact similar future transactions.’ Shows preparation while leaving room for their expertise.

You’ve got this! Try adding one personal detail from their bio - shows real interest. Small efforts make big differences :flexed_biceps: